Dialogue for flyer story (rough)

[alicia_h]

"He's a strange little fellow."

"Strange? How so?"

"He's spent half the time he's been here refusing to answer any questions but suddenly he just opened up. The problem is he keeps lapsing into German whenever he gets too excited and I have to keep asking him to slow down and repeat himself in English. I can't help feeling a bit sorry for him to tell you the truth. He gets this desperate look in his eyes sometimes, like he knows exactly where he's going after we get through with him."

"Why do you want me to see him, Peter?"

"Officially because you're a convenient and trustworthy interpretor. He can rabbit away all he likes in German and you can tell me what the blazes he's saying."

"And unofficially?" Erica prompted.

"He asked for you. Someone delivered your message the other day while I was in with him and he got excited and a little agitated. He seemed to be convinced your name was Haber. That's his name, by the way, Haber. We got some of them on their way back from Sheffield and he was one of the better flyers among them. Executed a perfect landing with smoke pouring out of his engine and handed himself in as quiet and calmly as you please."

"You said he thought my name was Haber."

"Yes and he was really rather insistent. I told him in no uncertain terms that I wouldn't let him see you if he kept up with that nonsense. Now if tell me you're secretly married to a German flyer who was barely out of short trousers when you were learning to fly, I'm going to look a real fool."

"No, no I'm not married to him. I'm his stepmother."

"Stepmother? Then what happened to your young doctor? I knew you'd taken his name but I had no idea if he didn't make it out with you or he didn't want to leave when you did... but you're implying now that you married a Jerry while you were stuck out there. I'm not sure if... Well, I think, my dear, you owe me an explanation and perhaps a stiff drink if that will make the whole thing easier to swallow."

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I started this for the prompt "I will always find you." at stayintheroom but what I've got so far doesn't really fit. I'm pretty much just toying with an idea for how to start off a short story version of the novel that I began in November now I have my main strand of plot more or less worked out.

Comments

[wytchcroft]

Hey! :)) so good to hear the voices of your characters :))

[alicia_h]

It was fun sitting down to write this. Peter the RAF officer is brand new - so new he doesn't even have a surname or a definite rank yet - and I already know something of his personality and his past and present with Erica. I'm looking forward to writing more with these two (three when they talk to the flyer).

And it's so nice for me to see Erica not moping around inside that bloody lighthouse! (And to know that I can write still picture her and write her when she isn't, even if she isn't saying much here.) ;-)

[wytchcroft]

I'm looking forward to writing more with these two //

and i'm looking forward to reading!
have you just posted your Holmes story on lj???

[alicia_h]

I'll have to get on with writing then. *Looks over various prompts and fails to crack knuckles*

No Holmes story yet, though. It's ticking over in my head and I have an idea forming in my head about how it's starting - Two scenes at St Bart's, first with Sherlock and Molly preparing for what's to come and then Molly and Mycroft when he comes to identify his brother. I've been reading The Illustrious Client today and I noted Watson's mentioning Holmes' belief the "only safe plotter was he who plotted alone". So I'm sensing that in my story there's going to be a lot of certain people wondering how much others know. Then I can start figuring out where all the Mycroft stuff I wrote and planned in my notebook before is supposed to fit.

[wytchcroft]

LOL! that's quite a lot of figuring then :))

i'm doing tolerably well on the scribble front... Tunnel is nearly done (or a version at least) plus i have two fan fics on the go which are quite different in tone and style. i felt after Tunnel (which is written deliberately in a slightly strange sort of English, especially the dialogue to try and suggest the 'Russian' setting) that i need to go back and brush up, or reconnect, a few things writing wise - and fan fiction is always helpful for that.
One is Sapphire and Steel and the other is... a surprise!

[alicia_h]

Oooh, a surprise! I look forward to reading all your scribbles when they come along. :-)

Which reminds me, I got Sapphire and Steel on DVD for xmas but I hadn't got onto that properly. However, my telly watching has been shifting back towards DVDs recently because of the recent *ahem* paucity of sources for random American shows, so I'll be popping it on of a night fairly soon, I imagine.

[wytchcroft]

have you ever seen the old (pre-Blake's 7 Terry Nation) show Survivors???

[alicia_h]

I can remember watching the modernised version a few years back but I've never seen the original unfortunately.

[wytchcroft]

ah, i've just trawled the whole thing which my sister got me for xmas. it's patchy and very 1970s BBC - but i enjoyed it a lot :))

[wytchcroft]

and yay! :)))

The Illustrious Client is one of my two favourite Holmes stories (And the Granada adaptation too). Just great stuff. I'm slightly amazed that no/one has made a spin off 'adventures of Kitty and Shinwell Johnson (koff! koff! there you go m'dear your job search is over, that's money in the bank!).

[alicia_h]

I think I'll include Kitty and Shinwell Johnson in my current Holmes project at the very least. I'd quite like to see how their modern versions. I mull over ideas for the spinoff, but I do have an idea that they are helping modern Sherlock hide in plain sight after his fall. :-)